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A couple of things: 1. I'm not sold on the premise. I get that you liken the dictator role to "Gods" which adds a symbolism of the mental captivity in binding yourself to a religion. But there isn't really much of a hook. It's a very archetypal story about a child saving the world. What makes stories long-lasting and potent, in my opinion anyway, is the ability to captivate on setting, story, and character. But any premise can be a good one. Yours just needs to be fleshed out more. 2. What audience is this going to? If it's kids then you can't get away with as many violent acts that show Tormorok's cruelty. But if it's adults then the message should be less...hammy. The idea of dictators driven by a lust for power is nothing new but there is potential. 3. Why should I believe that this 13 year old child has even the slightest chance of winning? Is he from some long line of fighters? Does he have a special trainer? Perhaps one of the gods favors this kid and backs their corner thus setting the stage for other gods to do the same. Capricious beings enacting a controlled chaos theory that shows just how warped such a tournament is in nature. But either way if I'm as an audience member expected to even slightly believe that this kid stands a chance then there has to be a reason. Think fullmetal alchemist for example. The idea of Ed passing the alchemy exam is ludicrous on it's own. But because we see that he spent all of his childhood studying, has a colonel supporting his endeavor, and can do alchemy without a circle, that makes up for the deficiency his lack of experience brings. Well, give me a good reason to believe that something tips the scales in our protagonist's favor. 4. This world is controlled by gods. Immortal beings who, by your story's own premise, care nothing for the lives of mortals and use them for entertainment. There is no sense of closure because I have no reason to believe that this cycle will end. At the very least give us a reason for this story to feel self-contained. 5. You clearly want the focus to be on tournaments. That's cool. I liked YYH, DBZ, and HxH as well and tournaments can be interesting. I will admit that your story sounds a lot like Shaman King at face value. But strong characters and differing motivations can more than make up for it. The bottom line is that Your idea needs more to it. Explanations, interesting characters, interesting obstacles, maybe a dash or two of subtle symbolism, and top it off with a good hook. It's not a bad idea but if you really want to, I'd recommend thinking more about the intricacies. Remember that your audience cannot read your mind. You need to invite them in.

My heaviest was 350 my smallest 124, I'm now 172 and still losing. The main thing for me is portion control and to continously drink water. I had a lot of weight gain after 3 major abdominal surgeries in 2 months. Everything is still kinda shifting around, but, like anyone else I have good and bad days. The main thing is to not give up. Also, Pokemon Go has been helping a little. The game itself is basically a reward system for walking outside.

Oh wow, Cinna, we share some interests, and that Persian Richard III project sounds really cool. Teaching in Turkey was probably the greatest experience in my life so far.

So I was wondering if there are other hunters out there who just got the game http://67.media.tumblr.com/2ece00b896e97e70bd2f33da05561953/tumblr_ml9fvfvIP91r5n0t0o1_250.gif I love Monster Hunter and I'm down to hunt with my fellow hunters I mostly use SnS

Resident Evil to me :P http://38.media.tumblr.com/a382f389972af0af409fced4dc13eb92/tumblr_nf7edzwBDK1tfwp79o2_400.gif http://24.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_m7ogrl51bk1r9cjqxo1_500.gif http://orig09.deviantart.net/a216/f/2013/172/8/1/jill_in_resident_evil_6_by_rpgxplay-d6a2aw4.gif

EDIT: Whoa apparently the Comic version also has multi-touch controls?? Not even sure if that's necessary but I guess that's a nice extra feature!

G.i.r.l Guy in real life (':

Um, I'd like to publicly apologize for this thread and airing my dirty laundry in public, what I did was wrong and I'm sorry. When I made this thread I just wanted advice on my situation, until I looked back and realized how stupid I sounded. I'm never going to do this again. So, I'd like to thank everyone who gave me support and offered their advice to me. All the parties involved have talked it out and resolved things. So yeah, I'm sorry for this mess.

I don't really play Killing Floor 2 anymore, but I might be willing to jump back into it if I had some other people interested. I can only manage hard at best though lol