My story for my 1st Manga

Well, while I'm currently working various titles this is the first title I'm working on: Tears of Terra The one story begins when a teen named Ken, who lives on earth but always felt like he never belonged there, he begins to think that something exciting would happen to make his lifestyle better and not too dull. Truth is that he is the descendant of a hero named Valor from Earth's twin planet named Terra which exists within a parallel dimension. On Terra, the things we believe as Fantasy exist, like Magick for example. But years ago on Terra there was a war between Heaven and Hell. The Holy Order of Knights fought in the name of Heaven while the Dark Order fought in the name of Arcanedeus who created Hell. Valor managed to defeat Arcanedeus and seal him away for many years, and Valor soon left Terra to travel to Earth via the Dimensional Rift. After many years of imprisonment, the magic seal on Arcanedeus is weakening and the Dark Order will make their move to free Arcanedeus, so the Holy Order of knights will need the powers of Valor in the new fight against evil and send one of their Knights, Zadklas to Earth to find Ken. But the Dark Order is also aware of this plan and send their own agents follow Zadklas through the Dimensional Rift to Earth. The battle on Terra will renew once again, and who will reach Ken first. what do you think of the story summary so far?

Can I get your opinions? And yes there will be Romance

It's a really good story, I see. I would definitely read this. The only thing I wonder: From whose perspective is the manga written/drawn. In other words: Do you also experience how Ken goes through his life or is this all a '3rd-person view'?

thank you, crap I havent thought of that but the way I see it is that it will be in third person view, but sometimes it will focus on ken and other characters from their point of view in different scenarios such as fights, it all sounds better in my head =P lol

It should work, but you definitely have to start the lore of slowly, suddenly using lots of archaic names, and fictional ideas is slightly overwhelming. Also if you can I suggest changing the name, at first I thought it said tears of Tiara, which I'm pretty sure is a manga.

thanks man, yea I was thinking the same thing, but I thought of this storyline during my freshman year in highschool, so I didn't know much about anime at the time and only a few so I might have to change the name for my manga later on so I can avoid confusion later on, thanks Dalton_Dark Prince