I'm making a story!!!

I can't really give any criticism as an author but I can say that I did not feel bored while reading and was quite into it. All those "bitches" weren't really fitting for me, though. Anyway, I would read another story of yours.

Thanks, I'm glad you find it interesting! I've been doing some romance genre before and would like to change some pace. By means of those bitches, do you think my characters are a little bit overboard or something? :/

Oh, yes. Now that you point it out, I do think its a lil off. Hmmm gonna do some editing again before I publish this in wattpad

Strive to avoid needless repetition of words, that's one of my pet peeves. In the first paragraph, you use the word "her" like 5 times in only a couple of lines. Other than that good effort. Needs some tweaking here and there but it looks interesting so far. I guess I ought to get back into writing myself.

Thank you! I'll get back to it again as soon as I have a chance :D Especially the grammars hehe ^_^; And I would love to read your story schlussel! If you don't mind?

Congratulations on wanting to read a story but be careful because of the fact that you might get offended by publishers or feel the need to stop writing me if people do not like your story.